Hmmmmm
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| Red Buds in Green Jug 8 X 10 Oil on Hardboard |
As far as composition, I think it is ok. The vase is the focal point and it is not stuck in the center. Maybe I could have varied the sizes of the other items. Maybe I could have created some diagonal lines.
But, I think the key (to me not liking it) is the color. Is it the blue/green of the vase? Or the pink and blue/green together?
Hmmmmm
Maybe I will try changing the color of the vase. The actual vase is a darker warmer green.
Or......maybe it is the composition. I like this cropped 8 x 8 version better. What do you think?
My, my Karla....you have yourself a dilemma. It is a very nice painting you know. It's probably only you who thinks anything is amiss. We artists tend to do that to our own work.
ReplyDeleteKarla, I've had many a painting that I struggled with the same way. I often take a photo & bring it into Photoshop. Then change colors there, or try on composition changes there - where I can "undo" if I don't care for the change. When I find what works for me, I then go about working with the paint. I like your painting - you may be having trouble seeing what the main subject, or focal point is. The flowers are wonderful, but the color of the vase is very strong, so it dominates. Use the computer as a tool to "see" things - like you did with the black & white study. When you find what you like, you'll know it, and know what to change (if anything that is).
ReplyDeleteI think you're right about the cropped version being better,other than that its lovely.Maybe put it away for a few days and then look at it.You might find there's nothing wrong with it at all. : ))
ReplyDeleteHonestly Karla, I love the color of that pitcher holding the flowers. It is exquisite, the color of a copper patina. I too like the cropped version better. Maybe it is because that background is so dark and when it is cropped it isn't as overpowering. Too, the smaller items look more balanced in the cropped piece. I wonder what Susan Carlin would think. She has a great eye. I think it is a lovely painting and other than the crop, I wouldn't do a thing with it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Carol, I don't know. I think there is probably something amiss here.
ReplyDeleteNan, That is a great suggestion about changing the color on the computer before changing it on the painting. I will definately give that a try.
ReplyDeleteThanks Azra. Good suggestion about putting it away for awhile. We'll see if I like it better next week.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry! It does seem out of balance. As you noted the small items kinda get lost. I was focused on having a focal point but I may have over-done it. Luckily this is on hardboard and trimming the painting down is not a problem at all. Who needs Susan Carlin when I have great blog friends to help me out!! (Not that I wouldn't love to have her help too)
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